New song I'm working on...need advice

Hi Zeudini! I listened to Intro-Verse-Chorus of yours.
As a first impression,i think you have to make a better mix.
One technique about music mixing with instruments is the pink noise technique.
Take a look to watch what i mean :
Also there is a lot of intense Pan into your each instrument.
If you wanna balance this,
make it closely to zero-0 for each instrument into your software mixer.
Otherwise,your instruments' melodies sounds nice.
If you have any questions in that technical level,ask me whatever you want !