My songs/poems.

Thought I'd share some of my words with you to see what you think.

1:
Sometimes I wake up
and I'm scared to open the door
like I might walk outside
and just fall through the floor

Sometimes when I'm walking
I'm scared I'll just stop
my feet will stop moving
and I'll just drop

Sometimes when I'm sleeping,
I don't think at all
and these are the best times
the best times of all

2:
'84 has been and gone
but everyone has seemed to miss the point
we're not controlled by the things we hate
like orwell had conceived
instead it's the things we love
a brave new world indeed.

Constructive crit would be appreciated.

 

I'm going to start putting music to the first piece soon, not so sure about the second one seems a bit short for a song.

 

The first one isn't really supposed to come off as angsty really but I can see why you might read it like that. It's pretty much just about how I think far too long about stupid little things that end up worrying me. I didn't know that crass stopped in 84 but that does bring a relevant new idea to it. Thanks for the comment yo.